I’m late getting this up, so- I’m going to bed now!
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The legendary boob pillows combined with the epic thigh pillows. Dang Little Miss power is lucky she gets to experience both at the same time.
And just like that, they’re now besties. hehe
Typo fix: “Is Reiko and Miyo” > “Are Reiko and Miyo”
Yuki’s panel 1 response is grammatically correct, but repeating the word ‘barrier’ twice rapidly like that sounds odd. I would suggest replacing the first ‘barrier’ with another word such as ‘shield’ or ‘protection’.
Typically “two-faced” needs a hyphen in the middle but you’re probably fine without it. Or you could just use single words like ‘deceptive’ or ‘treacherous’.
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Grammar aside, I love the range of expressions Emi’s face goes through on this page! The first panel very nearly looks like something OTHER than what’s intended to be, given her position snuggled against Yuki’s front. Quite a pleasant place to wake up, if one is not burdened by worrying about others or having just lost a fight!
Got the changes, thank you very much!
character grow and communication? is this magic?
Going to guess that 98+% of cases where Emi’s family got screwed over by wishes are a direct result of them being antagonistic idiots.
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The legendary boob pillows combined with the epic thigh pillows. Dang Little Miss power is lucky she gets to experience both at the same time.
And just like that, they’re now besties. hehe
Typo fix: “Is Reiko and Miyo” > “Are Reiko and Miyo”
Yuki’s panel 1 response is grammatically correct, but repeating the word ‘barrier’ twice rapidly like that sounds odd. I would suggest replacing the first ‘barrier’ with another word such as ‘shield’ or ‘protection’.
Typically “two-faced” needs a hyphen in the middle but you’re probably fine without it. Or you could just use single words like ‘deceptive’ or ‘treacherous’.
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Grammar aside, I love the range of expressions Emi’s face goes through on this page! The first panel very nearly looks like something OTHER than what’s intended to be, given her position snuggled against Yuki’s front. Quite a pleasant place to wake up, if one is not burdened by worrying about others or having just lost a fight!
Got the changes, thank you very much!
character grow and communication? is this magic?
Going to guess that 98+% of cases where Emi’s family got screwed over by wishes are a direct result of them being antagonistic idiots.